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Wednesday, 30 November 2016

editing a paragraph

Walt: edit a paragraph so that it has the correct punctuation marks and makes sense

Original
when it was our last day camping out in the bush my friends and i discovered that there was a bush that was really rare because there wasn’t that much bushes around because it was actually a huge forest it looked so amazing it had the smell of chocolate and strawberries on the outside it looked just like a stinky old bush

Change this paragraph

When it was our last day of camp. Out in the bush my friends and i discovered that there was a bush that was really rare.There wasn’t that much bushes around because it was actually a huge forest It looked so amazing it had the smell of chocolate and strawberries on the outside it looked just like a stink old bush.

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